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Saturday, October 17, 2009

Pricks

Minutes, hours


Each moment agony

Ticks

Small pricks

Restless misery

Burning guilty

Little flames

Fagots eat at my heart

Tell me you forgive me

10 comments:

  1. This shall "prick" anyone. The lines although blunt are sharp. Forgiveness should come as quick as possible. Hang on!

    Keep writing!!!

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  2. Deeply felt - Strawberry Girl. There is questionable love here.

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  3. wow this is deep the word faggots very strong here.. Heal dear ONE
    HUGS

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  4. Hello SG, it is SO GOOD to see you back on the blog. I have sorely missed reading your poetry, and my thoughts were with your well-being. I hope things are looking up for you. Your poetry does not seem particularly joyful at the moment, but I continue to hope. :)

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  5. I am liking the strong emotion that your words convey.The short lines equally so, makes for a stronger read.

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  6. Oh, yes - I feel your pain and anger...

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  7. Hello, SG. I have given you an award. Please look on my blog to accept the award: http://runawaymoments.blogspot.com/2009/10/award.html

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  8. Thanks all, sorry I've not been updating. I'm in a time of suspense it seems. I will get back to updating when my computer is fixed... :)

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  9. "Fagots eat at my heart"-and so the world wonders how the poets come up with such lines!!my friend always tells me that how do poets come up with such line!!reading this line i wonder why even though i myself write!!forgiveness never comes easily craving you each and every second!!jostling with your emotions and thoughts!!the whole emotion was blunt and described straight from the heart!!well written and keep writing!!

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  10. Heavealie, I am not sure where those types of lines come from as well. It just came out that way, it was an expression of an intense feeling. Thanks for the comment. :)

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